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A farmer was courting a girl who lived in the city. She was beautiful, but very stupid. The beautiful girl from town told the farmer, "If you truly love me, you will shower me with beautiful things." So the farmer decided to plant flowers instead of crops, for that would impress his love. His brothers warned him, "If you do not plant vegetables, then you shall have none for when winter comes."  He ignored their advice. When it came time to harvest, he presented the beautiful girl with his bounty of flowers. She was impressed, but the flowers soon wilted, and she moved on to other suitors. Meanwhile, the farmer was left without food in the winter. He then truly realized that you only reap what you sow.
^fllnthblnk is holding a contest for fable writing...thought I'd give it a shot.

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As far as I know, this is an original fable. I know the adage is old, but I've never read a story about reaping what you sow.
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:iconcallum-evans:
Very effective piece -- easily amongst my favourite written works on deviantArt.
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kittylivers May 23, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, thanks a lot!

Originally, when I sat down to write this, I thought, "This will be easy!" But it turns out "brevity" and "clear lesson in morality" don't exactly go hand in hand.
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Aro-chan May 18, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
It's kind of a mix of "the grasshopper and the ant" and the "the emperor's new clothes"

But I liked this, definitly original.. although I think it should be... you reap what you sow :D
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kittylivers May 18, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
You know, I really wasn't certain what was grammatically correct. I guess "sew" is present tense and "sow" is past?

Anyway, thank you for your input!
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Roughdoubt May 11, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Simple, as a fable should be, but very effective. A good Aesop indeed.

If you're in the market for suggestions, I'd say drop the 'But' and leave it at "He ignored their advice."

Maybe cut out the word beautiful from "...he presented the beautiful girl with his crop of flowers," to cut down on repetition of the word. By the same token, possibly change "...with his crop of flowers," to "his bounty of flowers," just for word variety. Minor things, of course.
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kittylivers May 11, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I am always looking to improve.

You're right, that "but" doesn't really belong there.

hehe, I said but!

I'm kind of tempted to leave "beautiful" in, just because its kind of her title, although I can see how it would get repetitive.

Thanks so much for the suggestions!
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Roughdoubt May 12, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome.
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