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We sit up and talk of
Unimportant things:
Of inorganic chemistry
Of complex calculus equations.
We talk until
We're blue in the face
Asphyxiated from the lack of love.
We stay up late
Making forts out of sheets
Until we can't keep our eyes open
And we fall
--asleep and dream of falling in love.
Unimportant things:
Of inorganic chemistry
Of complex calculus equations.
We talk until
We're blue in the face
Asphyxiated from the lack of love.
We stay up late
Making forts out of sheets
Until we can't keep our eyes open
And we fall
--asleep and dream of falling in love.
Literature
solitude
i am
trying to pull myself away
from this feeling
that consumes me inside
your absence is in
every object that surrounds me,
entangling loneliness
in the air
its all i can feel.
the time rolls onwards,
and onwards,
dragging me along
as i wait, as i wonder.
(i just want you to
come back.)
Literature
Tumbleweed, Tumbleweed
Tumbleweed, tumbleweed,
Why do you roam?
You go hither and thither,
Have you no home?
Tumbleweed, tumbleweed,
What do you seek?
Or are you just tired,
Of the desert so bleak?
Tumbleweed, tumbleweed,
Why don't you stay?
Why do you always go,
So very far away.
Literature
drafting
build forests from my fingers
and sandcastles in my heart,
singing
love, love.
singing
peace and love and bombs:
bombs of beauty
bombs of truth
bombs of "I'm coming home,
coming home to you"
leaving my boots at the door
never built a plane to carry death:
death and bombs- bombs without love
bombs without truth
sing to me of love and
we'll make a world for ourselves
under midnight moons
until you can build forests from my fingers
and grow roots in my soul,
twined in arms together:
strawberry blonde vines of love, love, love
a love that has never heard of angry
bombs.
and we will build a world for ourselves
in forts of b
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edit 5-30-11
changed "by" to "from"
This poem means a lot to me. As such, I want it to be the best it can.
What do you think of the line breaks? Did any of them seem funny as you read it? How did the imagery work for you? What sort of a scene were you visuallizing? Did any words seem out of place in that scene? What did you think of the word love being in both the middle and the end? What did you think of the end?
General comments, good or bad?
changed "by" to "from"
This poem means a lot to me. As such, I want it to be the best it can.
What do you think of the line breaks? Did any of them seem funny as you read it? How did the imagery work for you? What sort of a scene were you visuallizing? Did any words seem out of place in that scene? What did you think of the word love being in both the middle and the end? What did you think of the end?
General comments, good or bad?
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This is a very pretty poem, and it gives me a wonderful image -- in that sense, I really like the word choice for its visual appeal, but I don't know if I'm really on the right track as far as what dimension the piece is going in. I feel like I only scratch the surface, but whether that's an artifact of the way it was written or an intentional feeling is unclear to me. I do like it, though.